In that picture, the head looks a little too big, and the arms too thin.

It is probably the perspective.
(Her head does look a little big, maybe another view?)
Edited by StvnFloyd on Jul 11, 2011 at 01:43 PM

She is leaning forewards

Eyes are still a little too dark as well.

You really need to slap some better clothes/armor on her though, It'd be easier to judge.

I seem to recall halo's human army having strict guidelines on hair, so what is this even supposed to be?

Edited by SeL on Jul 11, 2011 at 04:14 PM

> models a woman biped

> asks for critique and comments

> gets mad when people say how they think a woman should look

Please purchase more logic, you seem to be fresh out.

I do think her butt looks too large in the first version. It seems unnatural.

The same people who jerk to pictures of Kat.
Edited by The Cereal Killer on Jul 11, 2011 at 04:17 PM

It's not as out of character as you may think.
See:

That's not a screenshot from a Halo game though :)))

Feigning ignorance because it doesn't suit your opinion doesn't make your opinion any more valid.
It just makes you look, well, ignorant.

Being too thick to get the joke I was making doesn't help your image either bro.

Having a thick hide helps you in a wild full of predators.
Having thin skin tends to make you more pervious to injury resulting in weakness.
But still, given your history it's hard to tell if you're simply numb in the cerebral cortex or just being immature.

Sarcasm obviously can't be an option (IRONICALLY I WAS BEING SARCASTIC IN SAYING THAT ISN'T THAT COOL).

When I said what I did, I did not mean it in the way of "her butt isn't sexy enough." What I clearly was talking about was proportions were off and it looked odd overall.

But no, you all have to continue to make me and others look like perverts.
Honestly, stop.

My advice is to look into a tool called "MakeHuman".
It's a tool I personally use to get anatomically correct human bipeds in order for me to begin making armor and the such.

I am much older than 99% of you. This was soliciting crit in a forum known to be full of young unsupervised boys so the crit was very predictable, and while it could be offensive, it was also "useful."

My crit is that she had wayyyyy to much junk in the trunk, and they eyes, while pleasant, are also too sultry too cartoony or too much make up - take yer pick - Look at Mirandas eyes and compare to these. She does resemble Lt Troi from STNG. Her arms seem way too pointy, no visible muscletone near the elbo and fore-arm or misproportioned in kind of a japanese-cartoon female kind of way.

While I was tempted to post a humorous comment that she is "Full Figured" - I would say she is attractive, but looks to be more like a vivacious vixen- not believable for most gun toting FPS women, but it IS stereotypical for casting in movies. For more realism, you could make her real meth-skinny, neurotic and ugly and flat chested with a big bodacious booty - it would be alot more realistic to real women cops (which I have encountered many) or military women. And if the comment offends you, let me point out another truth: Megan Fox wasn't in movies due to her acting talent, but rather her other "assets." If this offends you, you will probably not like the rest of your life. Trust me, men want "Megan Fox" with a gun and sex appeal, but reality is more like Rhea Perlman (google it, Danny Devito's wife) with a "He hasn't paid child support!" kind of attitude. It does remind me of this song: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=ctVmNbVu2KA (might not be appropriate words - yet I have seen worse text posted here - if so just remove the link I don't need no drama, it's just humorous).

I would suggest that her hair be french braided in the back to be practical to in-game purposes. It IS possible to have her hair fly/flow like the flag material - someone made a superman map, which he has a flowing-moving cape (problem is the wind moves/wraps it around his face).



Better - but do add some to the hips - allow for some curve, just not as much as the first pics.
Edited by Slap Happy on Jul 11, 2011 at 09:41 PM

I've come to the conclusion that the OP is either a horny guy or a Lesbian. Either way, very nice model.

you're an idiot :/
OP is a good modeler, does this make anyone who worked on any female character a horny guy/lesbian?
Anyway, yes i agree the ass looks out of proportion, but other than that it looks good.
And did you honestly think a board of teenagers (inc' myself) would look at anything else?
Oh ye' of too much faith.

I considered a lot of things(mostly logical things) when I was editing the picture and her breast was the least I worried about but I wanted to tell people that it was part of the changes I made in picture.You may be disappoint but i am offended.

If anyone added their own preference it was you. The most of the content of this model more or so seems to be ideals of a fashion stylist not a person who writes stories which would consider a military personnel in halo its like what sel said"I seem to recall halo's human army having strict guidelines on hair, so what is this even supposed to be?
". My 2 last Post meant the same thing especially being "dolled up". We could've had a respectful discussion.

I mean what I said lol but this is not my preference in women. I just wanted to help making your model look better but if you don't like my suggestions that's fine. I spent quite of portion of my time on your pictures. Do know that I will refrain myself from aiding people whom I have a bad experience with them in the future and I'll be thinking "It was time to abandon the sinking ship that was Umbrella "

telling me to grow up? >> psssh you're so full of potatoes

See, what I actually find funny here is that you say you're disappointed in the criticism, when the majority of criticism is to reduce her somewhat over-exaggerated features... I'm surprised that you somehow take offense to this, when usually the opposite would be the case; a female model gets posted up, followed immediately by immature comments to make her 'assets' bigger.

In fact, most of what they've been saying here is completely valid. If you were to take 10 women, at random (not even looking at the common servicewoman), what would be the chances that any one of them would ever have such exaggerated features? Realistically, none of them would, or if you were lucky, maybe one. In the battlefield, supermodel-like features would be even less common. So, when people come in here and tell you that your model is unrealistic for having such exaggerated features, they have perfectly valid complaints. What I don't understand here is why you seem to take offense to people asking that you don't create some unrealistic buxom supermodel as an average female biped, and instead say that a character with more believable or appropriate dimensions would be better suited for the game.

whats wrong with a BIG OLD BUTT i mean, i doubt she could really be that useful on the bridge of a space ship, she might as well be eyecandy. you know?

This thread keeps shooting itself in the foot.

^ agreed.


Another thing I don't think has been brought up, how tall do you intend to make her in relation to the other bipeds? (spartans/marines/ODSTs)

She looks like what I'd imagine an an ONI spook to look like. Anyway about her form, I don't really think there was anything wrong with her before and you might want to round the hips a bit. Most of these comments are a bit... over exaggerated and I think the modeler kjnows what they're doing since SHE'S a female of our species.

They all were immature but she is an extremely busty model.

The size and shape her curves are possible in reality but toning them down would make her look better (her breasts are the same size of her head).

OP consider looking at some proportional anatomy drawings.


Also go easy on the curves in the spine, it's very easy to push the lumbar a pit too far into the body.
Edited by YakZSmelk on Jul 12, 2011 at 06:43 PM

Lol an image like that is def not going to help her its too realistic and its okay to make a character look attractive to some point(cortana,miranda,halo wars ai and the scientist for example). Halo is a cartoony game.

biped looks good as is, is it for mp or sp use?

Just checked and you can in fact add flags as attachments (or widget attachments, rather). Make her ponytail a separate model and make a flag out of it, then attach put a marker there to attach it.
Edited by The Cereal Killer on Jul 12, 2011 at 07:06 PM

I don't think so. She's a she.
-Zekilk

That image is about proportion and proportions play an extremely important role in beauty/good looks and good art.

And I think your confusing Halo 1's weak graphics as cartoony, Halo does have a stylized art but it's by no means 'cartoony'.

Yes I agree on the second part; when you look at the graphics on the 3rd generation Blam engine, you can definitely see the realism.

since she is a woman and she is going to war and since the enemy always likes a beautiful girl and so do allies why not make her beautiful and also let some Cleavage show to be able to make her seem more beautiful and to give her more of a sexually appeal for being able to get her allies and enemies let her get her way.

P.S. by the way no I am not a pervert its from reading war books and playing war games.
Its just an idea.

Yeah, but the enemies are aliens. IDK if they acknowledge human attractiveness... we don't acknowledge squirrel attractiveness, for example.

The modeling looks excellent, but I must say.

DUDE. If she's going to be that tan, make her 2ft 4, stumble and scream obscinities. I kid you not people would think it's a snooki biped.


Edit: As Hunter said, she has a "Ghetto Ass". IF you intend to keep that, make her walk around all wabbly and snap her fingers at people.

Commander: We've taken a hit to our back thruster

Ghetto Girl: AWWW HELL NO. AHN AHN. NO THEY DID NNNNNN.
Edited by K_I_D on Aug 2, 2011 at 01:01 PM

you should hang out with more than 3 or 4 girls at a time, she's fine, i like her

LOL if you guys didnt notice this person is very sensitive about her models