About a month ago I finally began writing my story that bad been LONG in the planning process, roughly a year and a half.

In my story the Forerunner have returned en mass to the Galaxy via Gamma Halo, which its secondary purpose was an inter-dimensional gateway. The forerunner set themselves into exile, now have returned.

The twist in my story is that the Forerunners ARE the direct ancestors to humanity, 10 years have past since the event on Installation 00, the Covenant was booted from the Ark by the separatist fleet, only now they have reorganized. The flood never took control of High Charity, so it is still a looming presence.

Upon their return, Emperor Harken K'Taurn was shocked and outraged at the covenant for their horrendous crimes against the galaxy (I.E. the genocidal war and indiscriminate glassing of "garden" worlds).

This is the story.
http://www.fanfiction.net/s/5407830/1/Halo_Return_of_the_Forerunner

starts off a little slowly, but when i read through it all i quite enjoyed seeing the wrath of the forerunners

you could be joining the ranks of the other halo writers soon...

Not bad, I would have prefered to keep Cannon however. Apart from High Charity there were other ''Holy cities'' in the covenant empire. One beeing destroyed in Halo: First Strike.

There wasnt a holy city in First Strike.

it wasnt a holy city!
IT WAS THE UNEVEN ELEFANT (two squids kissing). but srsly it was the unyeilding heirophant, (i dunno if i spelt correctly) n the U.H. was a space port for the covenant fleet to get ready before earth's invasion. =p
nice story though!
Edited by Shade117 pro on Oct 30, 2009 at 04:48 PM

I was hoping for some face to face fighting but it was pretty good.although there probably should've been sentinels in the story.

Well the story so far was overall pretty good. It got way better in the 4th, 5th, and 6th chapters though. The first 3 chapters seemed short I guess. Maybe add some more details into them, or something like that. They just seemed short. Very good job so far though.

You need not worry, I plan to add sentinels to the story in the comming chapters, only these sentinels are of my design. They are my Sentinel Interceptors Mk II.



Me and a friend are also working on an image of Xarrha K'Taurn, so that should be available soon as well. Thank you very much for the reads, and I hope you continue to do so.

ur a good artist, & i love the concepts! keep it up!

It's been a very long time since I updated here, but the story itself has been updated many times. Those of you still interested check it out.

Prepare for Chapter 14: Those Who Fight.

Some classic Halo Characters make an appearance, expect the chapter to be released sometime this weekend.

EDIT: Scratch that, managed to work through my writers block and finished the chapter tonight. It's live!
Edited by ZeroAlphaOmega on Jun 17, 2011 at 12:01 AM

lol mk 2 sounds like metal gear

oicwatudidthar ;D

But yeah, I don't think unyielding heirophant was a holy city, I thought it was just like a supercarrier or something. Dunno, been a while since I read first strike.

Someone should make a map based on the story.
-Zekilk

That'd be difficult to do unless it was on Avalon. The story itself takes place in many place. I've included many major locations as well as several new ones.

I'd be flattered though, if it was done well.

I don't particularly like the Arbiter being a 'Knight' of Avalon. However, I guess it is ironic. He became a 'knight' of the prophets to destroy the reclaimers, nopw he is a knight of avalon to protct the reclaimers.

Meh.

I have an idea for a Forerunner weapon. Its basically a katana sort of, but its made of forerunner metal, and when it is turned on, it is covered in super hot energy. Kinda like a more practical version of energy sword. When it loses battery, you can still fight with it.

Don't see why you would bring a knife to a gun fight (literally)

I can understand the energy sword a little bit since it's more of a ceremonial weapon, but I don't see the point of designing a sword for combat when everyone else has guns.

Its not crappy!

It... needs a bit of polishing, but if he practised, he could become a good author.

I welcome any form of advice and criticism so help improve my writing. I've gotten quite a few beta readers for the past few chapters. I take this rather seriously, it would help me tremendously if you told me exactly why you thought it was "bad" other than just spouting off "IT'S CRAP."

Many many people have read and enjoyed my story, you're the absolute first that said it's bad. I'm no Eric Nylund but I'd like to have a little faith in my own work. Give me some legitimate reasons and I'd be more inclined to listen to you.

1: I'll need further elaboration sorry.

2: There is not a single Ace Combat reference in my story, if you're referring to the Aurelian continent, I did that without Ace Combat in mind. The singular thing that can be looked at as an Ace Combat reference bothers you but the integration of Gundam doesn't? How far did you read exactly?

3: If you find that a problem why are you even reading it? Why are you even complaining about it? If you don't like it let it be and ignore it. Let the people who like it like it, let the people who want to help me improve it do so.

4. Naming conventions are of my own exotic accord.

Please DON'T compare me to an expert writer. I'm no where even close.
Edited by ZeroAlphaOmega on Aug 4, 2011 at 07:20 AM