Hello everyone! First machinima i've been working on so far..

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=9S1SVa-YlCo


Things that will be worked on for Episode 2-

-Script will be longer with more dialog then this one.
-Episode 1 i sorta edited a bit to fast, but episode 2 will have a shorter intro. I made this intro freakishly large because the episode would of been like 45 seconds long. So i went ahead and put together a new intro that will be used.
-Camera shaking around to much. I've got a controler plugged in so hopefuly we can stop that from happening.
-Music will be reduced.



Basicly thats all i've been told that i needed to work on, so I hope it turns out a great success then episode 1, yet again i guess Episode 1 is always supposed to suck but gets better later in the make.

If you are willing to help with this machinima please add my xfire: bcshadow2468 and hopefuly we can get things done.

Also one more thing. DO NOT POST THAT YOU WANT TO BE A CAMERA MAN! Videos take for ever to process through anything, and it's hard to discuss the ideas i use instead of telling other people.
Edited by Kenshin3661 on Mar 20, 2009 at 06:52 PM
Edited by Kenshin3661 on Mar 20, 2009 at 06:55 PM

At least remove the sound of the footsteps. It's kind of strange to hear footsteps whenever the camera moves. Use debug_camera_save and debug_camera_load.
Edited by Gamma927 on Mar 20, 2009 at 07:15 PM

Make sure you make the player names just spaces. That way it won't say their names above their heads and try to add some dialog. I found myself skipping through your video because I was bored. That's a bad thing. Try to have less panning and screenshots in a machinima since your telling a story in a movie form. You don't normally have still frame photo's in a movie. Also intro's are overrated. The only intro you need is one maybe panning around blood gulch for the credits. Not every machinima needs to have a character intro. Establish the characters in the story.

Also keep in mind I'm not telling you how to make your machinima. I'm just suggesting ways to make it better.
Edited by Nexus Halo on Mar 20, 2009 at 08:09 PM

The screenshots are the only thing that shows names.. We do have spaces in the actors names to.. Unless you didn't catch that.

No just make the names spaces. Instead of having the name say "James" it would say " " then it wouldn't have a name above their head.

But make sure each player has a different number of spaces, or Halo will generate a random name, such as Bignose D=

LISTEN TO WHAT I JUST SAID!!!!! I ALREADY HAVE THEM HAVE SPACES! I DONT CARE ABOUT THE SCREENSHOTS THOSE STAY LIKE THAT! I HAVE SPACES IN THEIR NAMES IM NOT FREAKEN STUPID!

Next time make it more clear.

Lol at Caps.

Gonna be making a redo of "Consealed Episode 1" Gonna be taking everyone's advice for this one. I will have a new topic up when i get the actors i need for the job. :)