Hi everyone have you been wanting to be in a great series. greater than Red Vs Blue? well if you have you clicked on the right post. Curently our cast has 5 members and a camera man. But we need more. So if you think that this show will be a hit get ur xfire and mic ready cuase your about to be a star. thats if you pass tryouts.

Xfire is slayermaster93
Edited by Slayer117 on Mar 5, 2009 at 10:32 PM

And what's it about?

its basicly about these 4 freelancers who arnet realy that good they r just in because they passed the test with luck. So the big boss guy (Maximilion) invites them 2 at a time in his office and says that the other 2 are traitors and must be killed. and says the same thing to the other 2.

Its a comedy and if you ever saw the comics spy vs. spy thats what i was kind of thinking when i wrote the scripts.

I am the camera man.

He already has a cameraman.

Yes that is me.

Come on theres gotta be someone out there who wants in.

Well, it's kind of hard to compete with Red vs Blue. Maybe if we see an example of the script first?

Slayer I am the camera man right?

Yes yosh your still the cam man.

But any way does anyone want in?

I'll put part of the script up but not to much cause i dont want peopl to copy this!

*The camera moves into Maximilions office*
Max: So whats the Status Report for Today 7?
Service Droid 762: today Sir there have been reports of those four not doing so well.
Max: How bad?
7: Lets just say the company would be much better with out them.
Max: ok let me have a chat with them. Bring them to my office but 2 at a time.
7: oh god sir don't kill them here i just put new carpet down!
Max: I'm not going to kill them!
7: ok what ever you say sir.
Edited by Slayer117 on Mar 12, 2009 at 03:40 PM

Nice slayer.

eh the script needs some work. btw no one can beat rooster teeth at creating machinimas. (makers of RvB)Not even DigitalPh33r can beet them. His videos are even handed. But RvB is extremely good. Okay heres for my creative insight.
Robots/Androids/Cyborgs: Over used
Names: maximillion (bad), Aim for something a bit more real.
Critism: Becareful theres so many critics in the world that will tear u apart if its bad.
How to Kill: Guns, splaters, and throwing out a window is over used. But if its what you can get, use it.

It's not the best script in the world, and I don't really see how it will beat RvB, but it does look interesting still. You might want to change the player models around, and not use the original MP Spartan, because those are overused in Halo CE machinimas. Since you'll be on Halo Custom Edition, you should set up a custom map, where you spawn as a marine, or someone that would fit the act more, like Captain Keyes for Max (change the name), and Marines for the two people.

Ok geeze guys i over exagerated the greater than red vs blue part so just calm down! and you just asked for a part in the script, if you wanted a funny part i could've put it up here. so be more specific next time.

Funny part please.

Old man: yep! It makes me feel stronger than i am!
Old man: watch this see that car i'll stop it with my own body!
Kyle: sir umm i think thats a...
Old man: oh shut up you whiper snapper and watch *WHAM!*
Josh: *bursts out in laughter* Did you see that!?
Kyle: Is he dead?
Josh: who cares.

I meant funny.

So what's the main plot? Are these "Freelancers" just standing around talking? Or do they have a mission then need to complete? I suggest working on your script and maybe add some drama. Most machinimators fail because they suck at making a dramatic machinima so instead they make a comedy. Also I advise not to say it will be as good as some thing like Red vs Blue or Digital Ph33r because the lurking fan boys will jump out and scare ya.

You know what guys its gonna be a suprise! god everyones a critic theses days!

Well you better get use to it fast because when your machinima is released on youtube you will either get two types of comments. Good job or this sucks.

Hint: Farce (physical humor) isn't always that funny. Try not to overdo it.

You can join. Just add me to (xfire:slayermaster93) and I'll see if you got what it takes.

Check out the official site at http://slowbulletproductions.moonfruit.com/#

Just so you know, you mispelled "Livestream" on your site.

Oh oops I will fix that.

"Forums" is also spelled wrong.

Also, add a bit more to spice up the site. Right now, it looks kinda bland :\

What do you think I can add to the site?

Probably change the pictures, and make it look less like the generic template, with the logo plastered in a few places.

I don't get it :\

Yea, I know that. I also know you had a red rep bar C:

People need to stop trying to make comedy which fails in comparison to Red Vs Blue and try some drama. This is what Halo Machinima is sorely missing. It's a shame because drama would be so easy to convery in Halo, but apparantly people need to make "Yellow Versus Green" movies and all that.

If you don't want to do drama, fine, but try something different. Something that will set your movie above others.

Slow Bullet productions is a multy machinima group. we have 2 dramas being released soon and this one is our comedy. the other two are Project Recon sorta of a spoof on the story line in halo like Reach and No Escape a horor based one.

I know of several Good names for a comedic machinima:
-Hollywood
-Rectx
-Richie
-Pebbles

n thats all i can think of for a comedic machinima =/

EDIT:
And also, You are introducing something New into an old meduim, If you want your machinima To be good, you have to do something new, that the other Comedy machinima's havent done.
Otherwise, Your machinima is gunna be die quickly n unoticeably.
Edited by Shade117 pro on Dec 23, 2009 at 06:17 PM